William is dead I cannot beleive it. He was so young and joyful. I blame myself theres only one explanation.My only wish is to see Victor to aid me. He would know how to calm me down I just can't get over thes catastrophe.
It seems a bit short and choppy. In the future, it's probably a good idea to write more per post. Imagine yourself as Elizabeth, and try to envision the huge dull, gap you feel when a loved one dies. It gives you more to write about, and more emotionally satisfying.
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ReplyDeleteIt seems a bit short and choppy. In the future, it's probably a good idea to write more per post. Imagine yourself as Elizabeth, and try to envision the huge dull, gap you feel when a loved one dies. It gives you more to write about, and more emotionally satisfying.
And why is it called "The Date"?
I agree with Chris, and I like the way you put emotion, but it feels like if you were just talking, not really expressing actual emotions.
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